“Note to Self” by Geneva King from Best Lesbian Romance 2012 (Cleis Press). Edited by Radclyffe.
This entry is a study in story architecture and the effective use of showing vs telling. Each scene is introduced and punctuated by funny/sarcastic or self-effacing “Note to Self” commentaries made by the main character, Danielle.
In the first one she arrives at a restaurant prepared for a blind date only to find that she’s been set up with “Kizzy” aka Jessalyn, the ex-girlfriend she’s come to think of as “Satan in disguise” because of how carelessly the woman broke her heart. In the second she’s out clubbing with her best friend and roommate Raquel, and Raquel’s girlfriend Merrill. Danielle has a secret crush on Raquel but she refuses to act on it and it’s not clear why. I mean, yes, right now she’s respecting the fact that Raquel has a girlfriend, but it’s obvious she’s felt this way for some time and has kept it to herself. Next things take a sudden, unexpected turn, yet she still doesn’t admit how she feels, which is really maddening. The fourth scene ratchets the stakes waaay up. She’s going to have to take action, or she’ll lose everything. And in the final scene…
Yeah, right. Like I’m going to tell you how it turns out. As if.